Today, I'm going to be writing a 'journal response' about "The Giver", the book we are reading in humanities class. Now, I'm going to answer a question about the book.
Would you want your future to be decided by others ? Why or Why not?
Definitely NO!, I like to make my own decisions, but I do have to accept that I like when people help me make a hard decision but not to make it for me :). I believe that everything happens for a reason, and I just want to let my future reflect to the decisions I make. I don' t really like how Jonas's community, they assign you a job and they have so many rules!, in less words, they have your life planned. I mean if you don't follow their rules, they will release you. If you are old they release you, if you do something that is against their rules, they will release YOU! I think that there is not excitement in their life's, they know that they will work until they get old and they go to the house of the old, and then they will be released. That's the life plan for everyone. But who knows, maybe Jonas will change that..
Maria,
ReplyDeleteI really like your ideas. You explained it quite clearly. The sentence "I believe that everything happens for a reason, and I just want to let my future reflect to the decisions I make" made me understand it better. There are some grammar and spelling mistakes, but those are pretty easy to correct, such as life's to . Also, some times you seem to end a sentence with an exclamation mark, but right after that you put a comma. You would have to use either one, otherwise it wouldn't really make sense.
Although you had good ideas and stuff, I think you should try to add more details as to why you think that. Otherwise, it was pretty good.
Hope my comments helped....Thanks.
Maria,
ReplyDeleteI really like your ideas. You explained it quite clearly. The sentence "I believe that everything happens for a reason, and I just want to let my future reflect to the decisions I make" made me understand it better. There were some grammar and spelling mistakes, but they're easy to correct, such as "life's" to "lives." Also, sometimes you seem to end a sentence with an exclamation mark, but after that you put a comma. You would have to choose between the two, comma and exclamation mark, because otherwise it doesn't make sense.
Although your ideas were good, I think you should explain in more detail as to why you think that. Otherwise it was pretty good.
Hope my comments helped.....Thanks
There is a lot of information on why you didn't want your future decided by others, which is great. There are a few little grammar errors like you don't put a space between don' and t and you don't put a comma in front of a exclamation point. You also put information on why you would want someone to choose your future. Overall, good job!
ReplyDeleteHi Maria :]
ReplyDeleteI like how you gave a direct answer to the question and then elaborated on it. If you didn't say Yes or No, we would have no idea what you were talking about! Although you made a few grammar mistakes, I could understand what you mean and I agree that everything happens for a reason. I think it was a good idea that you talked about yourself and then related to Jonas' community. At the end, I liked how you summed everything up and left the reader thinking with " Who knows, maybe Jonas will change that..." On the whole, I liked your blogpost and good job!