It started four years ago when I went to a very small town in Colombia called Melgar. My grandparents, parents and I went to visit my aunts ex, ex boyfriend's, Andres, family. When we arrived we ate lunch, talked and played cards. It was almost 6:00 pm and my grandfather asked me to go for a ride on Andres' motorcycle. I said yes... but I didn't knew what was going to happen...
All was going OK !, until it started to get darker and darker. I said " Grandpa we should go back", He answered "yes, you are right"... It was alone and quiet, I though that we were lost, and then suddenly we realized that we were on a mountain ! My grandfather said "we can call your father" !, but when we look at the cellphone it was uncharged, and the gas of the motorcycle was all most empty. We waited ... and waited.
I was so scared but I knew that we had to find a way to go back to the house. I though "we should walk" so we started walking... there were no cars, no motorcycles and no people... until we saw a red car, my grandfather said "there is your father". I didn´t believe, until I saw my father going out of the car , I was so happy. then we went to the house and my mother said "I was so worried about you" I answered "ok, mom" and then we ate dinner and we went to bed. Since that I decided not to go too far from home , and to always take with me a charged cellphone !
Maria I liked your blog post every paragraph was telling how you felt but I think you need to work on spelling and grammar.
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I really liked how you explained your paragraph. It was telling about your grand father's motorcycle. What you need to work on is spelling and grammar.
ReplyDeleteI really liked how you explained what was happening. I think you should work a little more on spelling, punctuation, capitals. You sometimes did make a capital letter for the beginning of a sentence for example when you wrote, then we went to the house and my mother said "I was so worried about you" I answered "ok, mom" and then we ate dinner and we went to bed.(Pr 3). You didn't capitals the letter T. Otherwise pretty good.
ReplyDeleteMaria I really love your post it felt nice to know more about you but if I were you I would edit my punctuatin ,grammar and I would put more details on why I was so scared and worried .I do hope that my comments help and I am sure your blog post will turn out perfect when you've edited it!
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ReplyDeleteYeah, when you tell a story and put speech in after a new speaker there has to be a new line! It was a nice story though, you seemed a bit scared. And more details about how you felt would be great then your post will be perfect.